((So it's been a while since I've done anything here (hell, I didn't do all that much to begin with) mostly because a virus ate away my laptop and it's taken me a pretty long time to get a new one. Anyway, I'm posting this here for a reason. Here's the start of something I'm thinking about elaborating on; it's working on the same base ideas the epilogue universe uses, but it takes place in a separate universe (I guess is a good way to describe it). I've only written one paragraph so far, and here it is, let me know what you think!))
Itís not a dark and stormy night. Iím not sitting in a smoke filled club at the end of the ally. No, Iím sitting in my halfway nice apartment, doing... nothing really. My roommate, Lenny, is out doing who gives a shit what. I act like Iím pissed that heís out so much, but really I guess I might be jealous or something. I just moved here, to Gadem City; I donít know anyone and I donít really care to meet them. Iím not the outgoing type, so all Iíve really done is sit here, for almost a straight month. Itís a pretty damn heavy contrast to what I used to do. My nameís John, and a while ago, I was called Tornado Man.
((And that's all I have so far. Hit me with whatever criticisms you want (but keep the criticism creative, stuff I can work with). I have a lot of ideas on where this is going, just have to get it into words. Latuh!))
You need a bit more before anyone can give you any real criticisms.
First off, though, is the whole "secret identity" thing the team scene uses is confusing and passe. If you're gonna be, say, Tornadoman, you should just have tornado in yer story instead of a "real name".