needs help

[jojo]

k as you may, or not know i'm the one thats crazy enough to try to make a comic out of our rp... and i've run into my first minor problem, i thought i'd try to get an awnser before i get the Aura sketch finished. how the fudge an i supposed to do a commentay type thing to explain whats going on...

ex: "The morning was frosty as Io first stepped into the city of Babylon. Birds could be heard all around, but seemingly engulfed by the slow-moving fog. "This is it, I suppose," he whispered to himself as he walked through the gates of the waking city. His purpose here had much meaning hidden in his slow steps."

first paragraph of the rp, there are alot of things in there that can't be drawn. so i geuss my question to you guys is how am i supposed to show readers things that can't be drawn like the purpose in his steps.

[Shinigami-X]

The thing that comes to mind is to have the first shot show him walking into the town from a distance, the second shot with a close-up showing part of his face hidden in shadows, then the third shot filling up the bottom half of the page showing him walking into the city from behind. His first line might go into the second shot.

One common element in a comic to show purpose is to show an item the character has or the outfit. Another method that can be used is to explain it later with the story.

Dunno if that really helps though. ^^;

[PlutoMaster]

... oh my, i didn’t know you were a mind reader Shinigami?! or we just kinda think alike...

well for some help, here is the sketch of the first page i made way back when, before i got into Sefter 6 again.

When drawing a story that is not a narrative, you must use other more subtle ways of explaining the situation. Take this page for example. It incorporates the first two paragraphs of text. Some things could be explained through simple additions. Like the ground being a little frosty, or birds in the area (you could have bird sound effects going also). However, things like his purposeful movements, those would be very hard to get across to the reader without a narrative, the best you can do is imply it by what happens next.


(text in red is just explanitory and will not appear in final, its just such a bad sketch, kinda needs em)

Another tip, you don’t have to follow every part of the script exactly. Some thing sound better on paper, and others look better in a comic. So our story has to be nudged into the comic world because right now it’s more of a novel. Use your own judgment on what goes and what stays, don’t worry, we won’t lynch you.
We won’t?! ... *puts away lynching bat*

[jojo]

k thx you two...i'll probably end up posting page after page for critz then by about page 12 i should have the hang of it

[PlutoMaster]

oh ya,... i was gana try doing some covers for fun...

and i realized i have no idea what deranu or io are suppose to look like...
*hounds jojo for design sketches!*

[Shinigami-X]

Looks very good so far. =) Much better than anything I could do.