I have one of these for my character, but she changes, so I figured I'd post her a mid story bio....

About the story

Title: A Red and Black Sky
Main Characters: Harry, Ron, Hermione, Ginny, James, Sirius, Lily, Jess, Lupin,
Era: post Hogwarts (ginny in 7th year) and marauder seventh year
Person: Jess?
Genre: Romance
Rating: 12+ -> may have to up the rating to 15+ because the sex refs are becoming a bit too obvious.
Warnings: OTTP spoilers, AU, sensative theme, mild sex refs
Summary: It started when they were at school, it continued when their son was at school, and it still hasn’t finished. Only those who have stood through it all can truly see the perfection of a red and black sky.


The basics

Name: Jessica Wright

Nickname: Jess

Birtdate/Era: seventh year avec the marauders

Birthplace: irrelevant

Work/Schooling: Hogwarts, Seventh Year

Family:
Mother: yep
Father: yep
Siblings: nope
Extended Family:none mentioned

Home: Not mentiones, a very in school based story


About the character (paragraph answers will help determine what needs work)

Appearance: Plump (though getting prgressivly thinner due to illness), bright blue 'fairy-like' eyes, honey coloured hair.

Quote from Sirius : ‘It was a shame they were so pretty, he couldn’t stay too annoyed - after all that might hinder him in getting somewhere. Jess was just as beautiful her best friend Lily. She had waving honey coloured hair that cascaded down past her shoulders. Her sharp features and ice blue eyes made her look like innocent fairy -this got her out of anything’

In my mind Jess isn’t really your average plastic size 8/10/12 beanpole. Hmmmm….perhaps plump would be the right word. She does have a pretty face though. I think Sirius may be playing her up when he thinks of her, he can’t help it - they have an odd relationship. I think Sirius knows he likes her … but only in the way he likes every other pretty girl in school. He definitely knows they have a lot in common, and so does Jess but she doesn’t really want to admit it.

Quirks: doesn't worry about rules, clever but doesn't work hard, crisp addiction

Special Skills: ridiculously good at magic

Anti-Skills: sport, studying

Romantic Interests: Sirius Black - though she would never admit it. To begin with this is because she is supposed to hate him but afterwards she can't let herself fall for him because she knows she is unwell.

Personality: Loud, funny, but the kind of girl who has a few close friends, slightly proud and says what she thinks

Enemies/rivals: marauders

Friends: marauders, Lily Evans

Hobbies: pranking, eating, reading, she waslk to relax


Listed items (explanations are optional)

Pet: A Rat called Carden, though he is never mentioned. It's just one of those things you know.

Wand: wandlike?

School: Hogwarts

House: Gryffffiiiinnnndddooor

Subjects Taken: The usual ones, plus CoMC and Divination

Favourite Subject: Charms

Least Favourite Subject: HoM

Favourite Teacher: irrelevant

Least Favourite Teacher: all the ones that think she would be a perfect match with Sirius Black, chiefly Prof. McG.

Sports Played: Quidditch, occasionally


Understanding the character

What is his/her goal in life? To have fun before she dies.

Would the character change for someone they liked? Yes.

What do they appreciate most in life? Her friends.

What would the character say about himself/herself? "I'm me, love me or leave me'

What is the purpose of your OC (why are they in the story?)? The story is one that works with the metaphor of the calm before the storm and the peace after one. It begins with the marauders having a laugh in stark comparison to the goldeners who are struggling with the aftermath of war, however as things improve and the world builds itself up again, theing begin to crumble as Voldemort rises for the first time. Jess slow and painful death is that constant reminder that evil can never be kept at bay and will always come in different forms.

An actual quote from the story which sums up the character (optional): 'fraid not

A brief history of the character leading up to the start of the story (optional): The year before Jess is attacked by what she calls a silly 'muggle illness'. Although it can't kill her directly, it greatly weakens her immune system. Jess refuses to believe this and carries on at normal. She is not supposed to expose herself to bad weather. Naturally, with it being a Muggle thing, she refuses to take it seriously.

How did no one critique this? We're getting behind. :(

I love Jess already. Plump, a few friends (not tons, not none), loud, proud - these are all great. "Ridiculously good" at magic sounds like a Sue trait, but being bad at studying sort of balances that. She's bad at sports but she occasionally plays Quidditch? Is that something you just put in to the bio, or does that come into play in your story? I'd think about that some and really consider it when writing any Quidditch scenes - would she try to impress people, since she's proud? Or would she try to downplay her involvement, since she knows that she wouldn't be very good? Or would she just go out and have fun? I think that'd actually be good to include, if you haven't already.

Hope I helped a bit. :)

Elfy, my darling. You have inspired me! :huggle: *MAJOR PLOT BUNNY FOR UPCOMING CHAPTER DEVELOPS IN ANDY'S BRAIN LEADING TO THE GROWTH OF A GIANT BUNNY SHAPED BOIL*

Originally the quidditch didn;t come into the sotry, but for the chAPTER I'm working on, I've been trying to think og away to build up on character development. This might just be the way forward!

Jess is the type who would go out and have a laugh. She is essentially proud and cares what people think about her as a person, but her abilities and appearance and what people think of them don't worry her.

Yay! I love being helpful. ^_^ Now you've inspired me to go critique some more OCs.

Oooh, that sounds good. So she essentially just cares about what people think of her personality? (I love how you've explained her purpose in the story. I can tell you've had a good amount of time thinking and planning.) :)

That's just right!

How sueish is it that she is so similar to, and perhaps better than Sirius (who she sun-conscously likes)?

Hey, Andy! I was bored today and was browsing the OC Bio section, and saw this, and I just had to check it out ;)

I'm pretty sure I've told you this before, but I love Jess. She's absolutely wonderful. You've been doing very well with her in the actual story, too. Her physical description is a nice contrast from Mary Sues - the whole fairy thing. I really liked that :) But the "ridiculously good at magic" does bother me a little bit. And Quidditch - when would she play it? With friends? With Sirius and James? Would she do it of her own choice, or just because her friends are? Though I expect you'll elaborate on this in the chapter you're doing... Her relationship with Sirius is also, well, wonderful. So - I can't help but ask - do they actually acknowledge that they've fallen in love? Or does Jess' obstinancy about her illness (!!!) prevent her from doing so? That is a great plotline.

As a huuuuuuuuge fan of your work - a Muggle illness? OMG! (I hate using Internet slang, but they really do communicate emotions quite well.) While I dread seeing her die slowly and painfully, this downfall really is a departure from the norm - usually the Marauders-era best friends are murdered or something. This difference is very creative, and I look forward to seeing you develop it later. And, by the way, has Jess told anyone, i.e. Lily? Or, again, will her determination bar her from this?

Jess is an awesome character, but you already know I think that - I only hope I've helped you at all. :huggle:

Thanks for stopping by Gubby.

The quidditch scene is written but I'm contemplating cutting it. Currently it features Lily and James stealing away from a boys on girls friendly because they think they wont be missed amonsgt all the arument and banter. It's one of those really cheesy scenes that gives a lot away about Jess and Sirius, but I'm afraid that it's too much. I keep mentioning that she was unwell and has lost weight and I'm not sure if I want readers to pick up on what's happening so quickly. But perhaps it is already too late for that.

So yeah, she'd play with her friends and just for a laugh.

With the illness I'm not sure she is willing to believe how bad it is, so she def hasn't told anyone. After all she thinks that being affected by a muggle thing makes her weak. Perhaps this could lead to a fight between her and muggle-born Lily. That could be interesting. wha dya think?

Also is it sueish that she's so similar to Sirius? And are yu sure the 'fairy' comparison isn't MS?

Thanks for your input, you have been most helpful!