#30 - 'Against all Odds', (27 JUL - 02 AUG)

Striogi: I second russ's comment. The coloring is good, and the lines are good, but the coloring doesn't go very well with the sketchy style that works fine in black and white. I commend you for trying it out, though. Panel 8 works especially well with the purple blood!

Speaking of panel 8, there's a logic error in that one. He's holding the 'nid by the throat to keep it from biting his face off in panel 6, while drawing his knife. Then in panel 8, his knife has switched hands.

russ: I like the reflections on the face in panel 1! Remember to pretend to be a video camera when making storyboards. You pan 90 degrees clockwise from panel 1 to panel 2, then 90 degrees back ccw from panel 2 to panel 3, then 90 degrees cw from panel 3 to panel 4... it's disruptive to the visual flow. Try not to reverse the directions you pan or zoom very often.

bigfoot: panel 1 and 3 serve little purpose and reuse the cockpit picture. If you put panel 4 first and panel 2 second, and just added the word "fire!" at the bottom of the character's speech box, I think you'd make the comic more dramatic and less repetitive.

Alastor: nice 'nid and nice concept! I think the mouth would work better if you made the inside all red/dark in stead of fading to grey near the teeth.

Birdie: thanks for showing the process, and nice finished picture It's a little hard to tell what's going on in the front, though. Maybe if you shaded the orks a different color or a darker hue of grey, it would help to tell them apart.

Schwager: quality sketchwork as always. I'm impressed by the metal effect on the pot!

Comrade: try experimenting in the mirror with RAR I STAB YOU WITH A KNIFE DIE DIE DIE YOU FUCKING SPACE MARINE facial expressions. Your trooper looks a little sedate I commend you for including feet and doing them properly - often a difficult proposition - but I wonder if the image would have been better served with a close-up?

Well if you want to be that way i actually like yours but i do like the others too, But back to yours I liked the way how it didnt just show a plane flying over the gargant and blowing it up, but how you added story to it. Also I like the sketches alot becuase they look good even though I'm pretty sure you did this one pretty quickly but there's nothing wrong with that.

Alastor:
i just have to say that I really like yours but that the guardsman seems a little too much brighter. But thats just me.

Striogi: I've always like your comic style And I love how you colored it. It really suits it. Love your stuff!!!

Yes i know not really any crits or anything but im a growing artist... Hopefully

@Chapow!: Very cool piece, the chalks look good in their own way. It sort of depicts the chaos of battle in a way.

I tried to give him a grim smile if you can notice it. Thought I should have given him a more stabby expression. Yes, feet, I often draw in class and often start drawing with no intention of going all the way to the feet. It's a problem, because I usually end up going to the bottom of the page.

@schwager: Great work, you're a very skilled artist. You shade and tone everything so well, and the metal looks great. It has a nice cartoony feel to it.

I wanted the dangley legs because he's being choked, but in hindsight it adds quite a bit to the static feel of the drawing. Other angles could be fun to play around with, thanks.

@big-foot: good first go at a comic. It gets the theme of the week across well. though I think if you were looking at the rear of the aircraft and toward the stompa in frame 5 it would be better.

@Birdie: Great development through your pics. the final result is great. Being a 40k player I can really appreciate your little situation.

And thanks for the input. For me this was pretty dynamic, as I have never attempted anything like it. Next time I will go further.

@Striogi: Commented on dev art. The coloring has it's own pluses and minuses.

@Russ29: you're showing more improvement each week, keep it up. This comic not only ties with this week's theme but also that of the alliance theme.

If I have lost the epicness, I must strive to improve.

@Alastor: now that is definately against all odds. He is even missing an arm! Good work.

planning on expanding on this , had this idea all week , ended up only getting to do the logo so far.. been rather busy this week .

The idea is of a well , and elite squad of saboteur grots , striking at the heart of the enemy without being seen, demolition charges and sneaky tactics , winning the day against all odds...well generally because grots are rubbish!


G.I.T.S G.I.S.T GroT .InDusTReAL .SAbATarJ. TEEM

WHO DARES WINS DUSNT GETS EETEN BY DA WARBOSS!

@Comrade-K-Rad - liking it , would love to see some rendering/shading on this , definitly get the suprise of the marine down to a T

@Chapow - really nice use of traditional media , would love to see some ink work over the top of this to get some stark contrasts going on

@schwager - man i love your line work .. makes everything look so charismatic . That halfing.. you just wanna give him a slap for being so cocky , good stuff.

@Bigfoot - nice narrative , would have liked to see some change in angle like a close of on the pilot in the second panel to show a real sudden change of mood , so you could really see the shock/fear of the characters involved , it seems very similar like there isn't any change in whats happening , keep it up man

@Birdie - love seeing the development of images, really love the roughs stage , and resolves really nicely

@striogi- nice use of colour... makes me wanna do watercolour. nice composition of close ups included , really emphasises the key points of action in the comic

@russ29 - would have been nice to see some background in some images , just some gestured stuff or something , would add to atmosphere

@alastor... bad ass .. nuff said!

Hey JT - Because I'm overdue too, I'll be generous and say that you get the full 2 points this week!

All the points will get updated by the morning, I'm sorry guys! I just wanted to be sure I got up WSG31 tonight.

oh cheers! buut if im over , Im over . 1 point would be cool , and probably more justified as I didnt get me intended piece done. Tis up to you though!